That was pretty good - a bit too tropish (and the loudly desperate friend is one of my least favorite tropes), and the self-defeating internal monologue reminded me a bit too much of Hikigaya, but the leads have some potential chemistry.
I agree that it is a bit tropish. I tend to be more forgiving of tropes in oneshots because they only have one chapter to tell a whole story. So, the tropes are there to relay characterization to the reader quickly without devoting panels/pages to doing so. It is a balancing act though and different people have different tolerances for them.
I was mostly just observing that it was relatively tropish. I understand the role that tropes play in storytelling and don’t have a problem with it, as long as the author does something interesting and/or entertaining with them.
But I’d never before considered the particular need for them in oneshots, and can see it now.
That was pretty good - a bit too tropish (and the loudly desperate friend is one of my least favorite tropes), and the self-defeating internal monologue reminded me a bit too much of Hikigaya, but the leads have some potential chemistry.
I agree that it is a bit tropish. I tend to be more forgiving of tropes in oneshots because they only have one chapter to tell a whole story. So, the tropes are there to relay characterization to the reader quickly without devoting panels/pages to doing so. It is a balancing act though and different people have different tolerances for them.
Thanks for sharing such a cogent observation.
I was mostly just observing that it was relatively tropish. I understand the role that tropes play in storytelling and don’t have a problem with it, as long as the author does something interesting and/or entertaining with them.
But I’d never before considered the particular need for them in oneshots, and can see it now.